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DARK STORIES: The Flashlight by ~MadddMannn:iconMadddMannn:



I hate my room....It always feels like there's some one watching me...all the time....I tried telling her!....But mom doesn't believe me either. Yesterday I tried telling dad so he could make the feeling go away but he just told me it was all in my head. I can't trust any one any more...not even my best friend. I told him about it and all he did was laugh and called me a baby. Thats when I got mad and pushed him against a tree....I think thats why he's still mad at me....I shouldn't have pushed....but he shouldn't of made fun of me....I'm not a baby!....I'm not scared!...I'll show them!....Before night comes I check out my room to make sure I know where everything is and that my window and my closet are closed...now I wait....wow... It's so dark in here.... it's almost like I cant breath. If I couldn't feel my eyelids blinking I wouldn't even know if they were open or closed. It's quiet too...so quiet. Not even when I'm alone in the library is it so quiet. But I'm not scared..nope..not me. I have my flashlight with me and if anything makes a sound I'll see it right away. I turn the flashlight ON and OFF (CLICK!,CLICK) a few times to make sure it works... Wow....there really isn't a whole lot I can see with this thing...it doesn't matter I'm ready for anything!...As I lay in my bed I begin to turn the flashlight ON and OFF every couple of minutes (CLICK!,CLICK) just to keep everything in check.... But then I started thinking....what happens when I see it?...the thing that's watching me I mean. Will I make it mad?....Will it attack me?....will it try to eat me?...I mean I don't even know who it is...or what it is. As I'm thinking this I start getting a little paranoid, suddenly I don't feel so safe (CLICK!...CLICK!).....It got cold in here....like if it was winter all of a sudden. But thats impossible...its the middle of June. OK calm down!....I have to calm down. Dad's probably right...I mean it's probably all in my head... right?... Theres nothing really there right?....and why is it so quiet? Most of the time I can hear the neighbors dog barking....but I can't hear even that. This is just too weird...it doesn't make sense. My mind begins to wonder even more (CLICK!.....CLICK!). What if it's like a freak or a monster....what if its an alien...I mean do I really want to see it... (CLICK!.........CLICK!)....What if it's all ugly and twisted....Like some kind of zombie ready to eat my brains.....what if its some kind of.......KILLER!.....As I'm thinking this I can feel my heart pounding in my head....now I'm leaving the flashlight OFF longer then I leave it ON. My mind is going around and around in circles....I can't think straight...I need to calm down....Then I hear it...foot steps....coming towards me slowly...I'm scared out of my mind....I have no Idea what to do....as the foot steps get closer I try to turn ON the flashlight but I can't....I'm too scared....then the foot steps stop...I think OH NO!...this it.....I can feel it over me....breathing in my fear....I can't move!.... Suddenly my dad pops in the door with the hall way light on and it startles me...I drop the flashlight....he asks me if I'm OK and tells me that he saw a light flickering from underneath my bedroom door. I said I was find and that I was just looking for something. He asked me if I was cold.... I said a little....he told me that I should probably close the window so I don't catch a cold. Thats when I remembered that my window wasn't open earlier....when I turned to look I noticed that my flashlight was pointing to my closet and that it was open along with the window.....I may have made it through that night alive but I couldn't help but wonder.....what about tomorrow night ?????         
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It makes a good camp fire story

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:iconvenomequeen83:
Nice! I think if you make it a point of having him check everything is closed in his room it would make a bigger impact for him to see the closet and window open. Also as he thinks just show him clicking the flashlight on and off...The story is great I think if you want it to be as scary in writen form as spoken you need to change the normal format you use. Great start though!
:iconunseeliepixiegirl:
good characterization. the little kid is totally right, though. What about the next night?!

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